PB1B _ LTE
The public argument I chose for WP1 is animal rights and I want to encourage people to respect the life of animal and banned the inhumane practice to any of them. I saw many negative news about animal test and animal mistreatment even someone try to take advantage of other people's love for pets to earn improper money. These action should be prohibited immediately.
"Moves" in three example:
1. giving real life example to touch with readers and prove the opinion effectively to audience
2. Many data and evidence is showed on the LTE which helps increase the credibility.
3. uncompromising word choice
In three examples I found in PB1A, I think the second is the best one. First, the writer use evidence such as "Excessive alcohol consumption is the third-leading preventable cause of death and is responsible for approximately 88,000 deaths (including 4,300 deaths among underage youths) annually in the United States." to prove the harm of alcohol. The data in the LTE give readers a heavy impact that alcohol can kill people easily. Second, writer shows the identity of himself which is a "public-health lawyer" and make the LTE more credible. Last but not least, the writer use very smooth language expression and logical structure to enhance readability.
However, the first LTE seems to be weight more simple then the second one. Writer only claims that the severity of marijuana and alcohol. And his LTE is not that credible as the second one. Also, the third LTE is also pretty good in my opinion. The writer provides many examples and some evidence in the LTE. But the tone and flow he uses is not strong enough to talk about the issue and against others.
"Moves" in three example:
1. giving real life example to touch with readers and prove the opinion effectively to audience
2. Many data and evidence is showed on the LTE which helps increase the credibility.
3. uncompromising word choice
In three examples I found in PB1A, I think the second is the best one. First, the writer use evidence such as "Excessive alcohol consumption is the third-leading preventable cause of death and is responsible for approximately 88,000 deaths (including 4,300 deaths among underage youths) annually in the United States." to prove the harm of alcohol. The data in the LTE give readers a heavy impact that alcohol can kill people easily. Second, writer shows the identity of himself which is a "public-health lawyer" and make the LTE more credible. Last but not least, the writer use very smooth language expression and logical structure to enhance readability.
However, the first LTE seems to be weight more simple then the second one. Writer only claims that the severity of marijuana and alcohol. And his LTE is not that credible as the second one. Also, the third LTE is also pretty good in my opinion. The writer provides many examples and some evidence in the LTE. But the tone and flow he uses is not strong enough to talk about the issue and against others.
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